Unity
Nothing lovelier than twilight beauty
If the Moon, once again,
kissed mother Earth
The Dawn would last forever
No other light would compare
© 2005 Kahdoosch
If the Moon, once again,
kissed mother Earth
The Dawn would last forever
No other light would compare
© 2005 Kahdoosch
posted by Kahdoosch at 5:01 PM
2 Comments:
This is really beautiful. And to me it is soooo true.
Thanks Shy, I think there is a beauty that borders on erotic in the softness that twilight brings; twilight nights; twilight years. Something about the Earth and the Moon being entwined (while the jealous sun looks on). It was inspired by my shameful re-writing of Sting's 'fields of gold'. When I perform it (I do the Eva Cassidy version 'cos the Sting version is pap) I always change one of the lines to:
'You can tell your god and his jealous son, that we walked in fields of gold'
In the last verse
This is one of my 'fridge magnet' poems. You get a passel of little strip magnets and stick labels on them. Write a different word on each individual label. when you are waiting for your kettle to boil, etc, you can write little poems on your fridge (a trip to McDonalds is a fridge magnet poem as well). It's more like construction than composition because you have a limmited word choice and it forces you to think down avenues that you might not find otherwise.
It can get really frustrating though, when you forget to write one down and someone re-arranges it. I always forget the exact structure and I find that I can never recapture the essence of them.
My favourite was one that ended
"Whilst children dream of chocolate"
I love that line but I can't remember a single other one of the poem.
Ah well,
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